the bright Sunshine
lighting the ends of Leaves
making them Golden
throwing Blossoms
into a brilliance of Color
& Fragrance
the Birth and Renewal of
Hope
the bright Sunshine
floating on the tops of Rivers
turning them to Silver
new
Sparkling
the Remembrance of
Beauty
the bright Sunshine
Carressing the lids of the Birds
waking Life
& teaching its song
Until the Heart of the Earth remembers to Sing
the Breathing of Love















Comments
first off, the capitalization of the different words jumped out at me right off. it makes the words stand out more, without actually using bold or italics. i liked it much. the next most apparent thing is the arrangement of the text. i like it when it isn't just a normal style. it is more interesting to read like this and you did very well with it. also, please don't apologize for it 'not being prettier' or anything of the sort. it truly is a grand poem. it makes me smile to read it. it really is happy, and beautiful. don't apologize.
especially that 'more than i deserve' part. poo. that is not true. everyone deserves good friends and there is no way you don't. no one should think they don't deserve a good friend here and there; and i don't want to sound like i'm the greatest friend ever, because i'm not. but i'm glad i have been able to at least help you a little. that is what i want to be able to do most. you don't owe me anything. you are a an awesome friend also and don't need to make comparisons or anything. it is all good. love ya bud. i wish i could help more with the poem, but i am just lacking there lately.
anyways, i am leaving tomorrow and i'll miss you. don't hold back from calling me and things while i am gone. i'd very much love to hear from ya.
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~poetzhaven
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Hope is probably both the strongest and most fragile emotion we hold, as it flies in the face of logic while taking on all its strength from the will of he who wields it.
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